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What! A test?

by Black Ghost


What! A test?
surely you jest
Because I haven't studied one bit
but I find it's no joke
then I feel I might choke
That I need to lay down for a rest
I desperately look
For a note that I took
that could help me, maybe to pass
but nothing I find
no knowledge in my mind
so I plead a bad case of gas
My teacher says no
That I cannot go
That I must stay here and take my exam
I then ask my friend to lend my his book
For answers to cram in my head
He gives me the test and guess What! A fat F
When I get home I know that I'm dead

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Mon Feb 06, 2006 7:36 pm
Eyes wrote a review...



He he :lol: . It's very funny and I so know what you're talking about!

However , :evil: I have some reservations about the final two lines. They seem to be different in meter or something to the the other lines. I think it was because the others were all grouped in threes. Maybe :

I then ask my friend to lend my his book
For answers to cram in my head
He gives me the test and guess What capitilisation ! A fat F


When I get home I know that I'm dead


Perhaps this would it make it read better ?? It's very good though !! :)




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Mon Feb 06, 2006 4:10 am
Griffinkeeper says...



Nicely done.





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